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My Help Comes from You
#1
Newest Scandalous Grace song!  All comments are welcome (yes, even from Shannon!   Big Grin )

https://soundcloud.com/beaglesound/my-he...s-from-you

Beagle: Lead Vox, Rhodes, Drum programming, Mix, Lyrics, Music
Michael Hanson: BGVs, Bass, Electric Rhythms, Lead Intro and bridge
Sean Peifer: BGVs, Electric Rhythms, Lead bridge and outro

Intro 
Verse 1
I’ve been down and out again Wandering aimlessly
I keep repeating sin but then You pull me in!

Chorus
My help comes from You! My help comes from You!
No matter what I do, my help comes from You
My help comes from You! My help comes from You!
Oh Lord You pull me through, and my help comes from You

Verse 2
I look around and all I see Is all the grief and suffering
The world is full of pain, but then I call Your name!

Chorus 
Bridge
Chorus
My help comes from You! My help comes from You!
No matter what I do, my help comes from You
My help comes from You! My help comes from You!
Oh Lord You pull me through, and my help comes from You
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#2
(03-25-2017, 08:38 PM)Beagle Wrote: Newest Scandalous Grace song!  All comments are welcome (yes, even from Shannon!   Big Grin )

https://soundcloud.com/beaglesound/my-he...s-from-you

Beagle: Lead Vox, Rhodes, Drum programming, Mix, Lyrics, Music
Michael Hanson: BGVs, Bass, Electric Rhythms, Lead Intro and bridge
Sean Peifer: BGVs, Electric Rhythms, Lead bridge and outro

Intro 
Verse 1
I’ve been down and out again Wandering aimlessly
I keep repeating sin but then You pull me in!

Chorus
My help comes from You! My help comes from You!
No matter what I do, my help comes from You
My help comes from You! My help comes from You!
Oh Lord You pull me through, and my help comes from You

Verse 2
I look around and all I see Is all the grief and suffering
The world is full of pain, but then I call Your name!

Chorus 
Bridge
Chorus
My help comes from You! My help comes from You!
No matter what I do, my help comes from You
My help comes from You! My help comes from You!
Oh Lord You pull me through, and my help comes from You

Hi Beagle,

Very nice song......only change I might recommend is your imagery.....You pull me through"  "world is full of pain and suffering", "wandering aimlessly"....etc.   You may want to refer to scriptural examples of how...help comes from God.....

Not saying you are off-track....just maybe some fine tuning....

Keep or sweep..

Neil

Psalm 121

I lift up my eyes to the mountains—
    where does my help come from?
My help comes from the Lord,
    the Maker of heaven and earth.

He will not let your foot slip—
    he who watches over you will not slumber;
indeed, he who watches over Israel
    will neither slumber nor sleep.

The Lord watches over you—
    the Lord is your shade at your right hand;
the sun will not harm you by day,
    nor the moon by night.

The Lord will keep you from all harm—
    he will watch over your life;
the Lord will watch over your coming and going
    both now and forevermore.


New International Version (NIV)
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#3
Neil - thank you so much for the listen and the great comments! I absolutely appreciate your suggestions. you have a point about the imagery - I'll certainly consider that.
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(03-25-2017, 08:38 PM)Beagle Wrote: Newest Scandalous Grace song!  All comments are welcome (yes, even from Shannon!   Big Grin )

https://soundcloud.com/beaglesound/my-he...s-from-you

Beagle: Lead Vox, Rhodes, Drum programming, Mix, Lyrics, Music
Michael Hanson: BGVs, Bass, Electric Rhythms, Lead Intro and bridge
Sean Peifer: BGVs, Electric Rhythms, Lead bridge and outro

Intro 
Verse 1
I’ve been down and out again Wandering aimlessly
I keep repeating sin but then You pull me in!

Chorus
My help comes from You! My help comes from You!
No matter what I do, my help comes from You
My help comes from You! My help comes from You!
Oh Lord You pull me through, and my help comes from You

Verse 2
I look around and all I see Is all the grief and suffering
The world is full of pain, but then I call Your name!

Chorus 
Bridge
Chorus
My help comes from You! My help comes from You!
No matter what I do, my help comes from You
My help comes from You! My help comes from You!
Oh Lord You pull me through, and my help comes from You
Hello Beagle,
  I like this song. The chorus is a great sing along, love that. The first line of your song is important to grab people right away so a near rhyme doesn't always work, although there are exceptions to the  rule. I was wondering if you might consider this for the first line;

I’ve been down and out again by reckless Wandering (Just did a reverse on your words/ Reckless flowed off the tongue a little easier.)

A road paved by my sin but than you pull me in ( Sticks with the theme stated in the first line)

Not drastic changes just some suggestions that you may consider. You can sweep it or keep it Shy . Thanks for sharing this post God bless!

Jordan
"A healthy Spiritual walk with God leads you down a Natural Path of worship."
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#5
Great thoughts, Jordan! thank you for your listen and your suggestions!

I will certainly consider reworking the lyrics some when I look at putting this on our next CD. that's when we would have an opportunity to rerecord some of the parts before CD release.

In the meantime, I've adjusted the vocal timing on the choruses to better line them up together. I've put a new version of now with those changes.

thanks again everyone for your comments! they are well taken!
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