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#1
Here I am again, believing the same old lies/ 
Here I go again, trying to fix my own life/  
Guess I should know by now, I can't do it on my own/
So

Help me Jesus, to want you, more/ 
Help me savior, to love you more/
More than anything the world promises me/
Jesus help me want to be free/ 

I know what I should do is give this up to you/ 
Let go of the control , cause it was never true/ 
But the lies are still so loud in my mind/ 
So 

Help me Jesus to want you, more/
Help me saviour to love you more/
More than anything the world promises me/
Jesus help me want to be free/ 



Jesus help me want to be free 






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#2
Hi Sbg,
I combined your two songs & made one. I know this is presumptuous of me (one of my many weaknesses), but if you like the new lyric, let me know, & I will work on that vocal reference we talked about, or even better yet, you can use the music you already have. I will go either way you want with it. If you absolutely hate it, let me know that too Smile

Want to be free
Verse 1
I'm tired of this fight, the war inside my mind
Voices that keep telling me the same tired lies
I want to want to be free, but don't always believe
That You are really good, and You're all I need

Pre-chorus
I know what I hear in my mind is not from you
But after a while the lies still sound like truth
So I guess what I am praying is

Chorus:
Help me want to want to be free
Cause right now I'm in the in-between
In-between the lies and the truth
In-between the devil and You
I want you to help me fight
The demons in my mind
I want more of You, less of me
And I want, to want to be free

Verse 2
Here I am again, believing the same old lies
Here I go again, trying to fix my own life
Guess I should know by now, I can't do it on my own

Verse 3
I know what I should do is give this up to you
Let go of the control, cause it was never true
But the lies are still so loud in my mind

Pre-chorus
Chorus

Bridge
I've been here for so long now
Standing on the same battleground
Not moving forward not moving back
Just standing here letting the enemy attack

Verse 4
Help me Jesus to want you more
Help me Savior to love you more
More that anything the world promises me
Jesus help me want to be free

Chorus
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#3
Hi savedbygrace99,

That's one great thing about Shannon....she stays one step ahead of you .....guaranteed!

I do think her work on your song(s) has improved the outcomes.....one thing lyrically that I try not to use except when I have no other choice is the word, "Help".....for some reason when I use that word the song ends up kind of flat lyrically.

So here's a way to eliminate word "Help" if you chhose to do so....

Help me want to want to be free (Change my heart to want to be free)
Cause right now I'm in the in-between (Lord, I'm stuck in my in-between)
In-between the lies and the truth
In-between the devil and You
I want you to help me fight (I need Your strength, Lord, to fight)
The demons in my mind
I want more of You, less of me
And I want, to want to be free
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#4
I liked the idea of the song at the beginning, but now that ShandonB redid it... I think it has HUGE potential! Great job.
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