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Want to be free
#1
It's been a while since I've been on here, but tonight I wrote this. It's about wanting to be free from my eating disorder but also wanting to keep it. Kinda stuck in the inbetween zone where I know I should want to be free from  it, but I don't always. It was quickly written and I don't know if it's any good but thought i'd put it on here for comments and opinions anyway!

-Savedbygrace

Verse 1.
I'm tired of this fight, the war inside my mind/
Voices that keep telling me the same tired lies/
I want to want to be free, but don't always believe/
That You are really good, and You're all I need/

Pre-chorus: 
I know what I hear in mind is not from You/
But after a while the lies still sound like truth/
So I guess what I am praying, is

Chorus:
Help me want to want to be free/
Cause right now i'm in the inbetween/
inbetween the lies and the truth/
Inbetween the devil and You/
I want you to help me fight/
The demons in my mind/
I want more of You, less of me/
And I want, to want to be free/


Verse 2
I've been here for so long now/ 
Standing on the same battleground/
Not moving forward not moving back/ 
Just standing here letting the enemy attack/ 

Pre-chorus: 
I know what I hear in my mind isn't from You/
But after a while the lies still sound like truth/
So I guess what I am praying, is

Chorus:
Help me want to want to be free/
Cause right now i'm in the inbetween/
inbetween the lies and the truth/
Inbetween the devil and You/
I want you to help me fight/
The demons in my mind/
I want more of You, less of me/
And I want, to want to be free/

Jesus help me want, to want to free
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#2
I forget, are you a musician or a lyricist? I might be able to help with melody, but I am not a great instrumentalist. Anyway, happy to help if I can Smile
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#3
(12-03-2016, 08:48 PM)ShannonB Wrote: I forget, are you a musician or a lyricist? I might be able to help with melody, but I am not a great instrumentalist. Anyway,  happy to help if I can Smile

Hey! I am kinda both- if you wanna suggest a melody im good with that :Smilewhat you do you think of the words??
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#4
I don't offer unless I see some promise. Am I wrong, or did you also write a song about wanting a better life for your daughter? I happen to like this type of honesty Smile
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#5
I really like what you have here.. minor suggestion in the last line of the chorus.

Instead of and I want to want to be free

How about

Jesus, help me to be free

Keep or sweep! But otherwise great lyrics.
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#6
I really like this lyric! Would love to hear it put to music.
Tony
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#7
Great work.
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#8
Hey, Sgb, I kinda dropped the ball on this one..If you message me your e-mail address, I can send you a rough vocal reference to see whatcha think. If you like it, maybe Tone can fill it out with some guitar Smile
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#9
Hey everyone!! So- I just sorta wrote a similar song to this and posted it in a new thread. I have music for the new one but sure, I can email you Shannon to see what you've come up with Smile thanks for the positive feedback! Smile
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