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He is I AM
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Please see revisions below in this string..... Thanks, Neil


He is I AM

copyright Neil Sleevi
 
Verse 1:

He’s the source of all forgiving
Ever living
He's been called, "Great I AM"

Jesus probes for our reflection
With this question…..
Who Do You Say That I Am?

Chorus:

He is Jesus Christ, the One Messiah
The Son of the Living God
He is King of Saints; and King of Glory
Anointed Holy One
He’s Sovereign over all the Earth
He’s Savior and He’s Lord
He is I AM
He is I AM

Verse 2:

He’s the Rock and Sure Foundation
For Salvation
Born to die, Man for man
Will your heart condemn or back you
When He asks you
Who Do You Say That I Am?

Chorus

Verse 3:

Prince of Life, who's now arisen
From death's prison

Heaven's own Perfect Lamb
Will He say He does not know you
If this throws you
Who Do You Say That I Am?

Chorus

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#2
Neil. I like this.

Vs 3 is awkward though: 'If this throws you'. The 'persons' don't match up. Would suggest you replace 'If this throws you' with 'When he asks you'. I don't think it matters that it's a repeat.

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A.
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A Hendricks....thank you for your comments...I think this may be better version...for further critiques...thanks!  Neil

He is I AM
Copyright Neil Sleevi

Verse 1:

He’s the source of all forgiving
Ever living
He's been called, "Great I AM"
Now He probes for our reflection
With His question…..
Who Do You Say That I Am?
 
Chorus:
 
He is ....Jesus Christ, the One Messiah
The Son of the Living God
He is ....King of Saints; and King of Glory
Anointed Holy One
He’s Sovereign over all the Earth
Our Master and Our Lord
He is I AM
He is I AM
 
Verse 2:

He’s the Rock and Sure Foundation
For Salvation
Born to die, Man for man
Now the Savior all-inspiring
Is inquiring
Who Do You Say That I Am?

Chorus
 
Verse 3

He’s the Prince of Life arisen
From death's prison
Heaven's own Perfect Lamb
Will your heart condemn or back you
When He asks you
Who Do You Say That I Am?

Chorus

He's the Christ, the One Messiah
The Son of the Living God
He is ....King of Saints; and King of Glory
Anointed Holy One
He’s Sovereign over all the Earth
Our Master and Our Lord
He is I AM
He is I AM

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#4
Neil,

I generally like this a lot, (here we go) but ...

While there is poetic license, I have always previously heard him being called The great I AM, and never just "Great I AM".
From death he did rise and will come again.
Move on with him now to be ready for then.
the gruvster
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#5
Better Neil. Now, I would love to see some perfect rhyme in the chorus, and this line: 'Will your heart condemn or back you'...not keen on the condemn bit. It feels a bit heavy theologically. Could you change it up a bit to reflect His grace a bit more?

Comin' along.

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A.
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