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Follow Him
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Please see latest version far below.....Any comments to improve on this one are still appreciated  Thank you.  Neil



Verse 1
 
If you will follow Jesus Christ
You will never walk in darkness
You will walk in the light
He is the Light and the Light of Life

 
Chorus:
 
Let go of your life, leave it behind
Let it go for Jesus’ sake
Release it to the Lord and you will find
True life from believing in Jesus’ Name

Let go of your life, leave it behind
Lose your life for Jesus’ sake
Give in to God as He designed
Let go, let God, have His way

Verse 2

 
If you want to follow Him
Choosing to be His disciple 
You must turn from your ways
Pick up your cross ev’ry single day
 

Chorus

Instrumental Bridge
 
Verse 3
(Key change)

 
If you will serve Him, follow Him
Where He is His servant will be
There will be blessings in return
God will honor anyone who serves

 
Chorus
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#2
Hi Neil,


Does the content of the first verse really serve the hook? Does it truly serve the content of the whole chorus? IMO v2 serves the hook best. I have the same issue with my latest write and I only manage to address it in the bridge (which, of course, is too late in the song). Is the chorus sufficiently concise? Could it be condensed without sacrificing the essence?
I am a damp hamster, a small moist rodent with a pea-sized brain... so what do I know?! 

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(09-26-2017, 09:27 AM)damp hamster Wrote: Hi Neil,


   Does the content of the first verse really serve the hook? Does it truly serve the content of the whole chorus? IMO v2 serves the hook best. I have the same issue with my latest write and I only manage to address it in the bridge (which, of course, is too late in the song). Is the chorus sufficiently concise? Could it be condensed without sacrificing the essence?

Damp Hamster,

You ask hard questions.  Here is a different approach:

Follow Him
 
V1
 
If you will follow Jesus Christ
You will never walk in darkness
Let God's new day end your night
Follow the Light
He’s the Light of Life
 
V2
 
If you want to follow Him
Choosing to be his disciple
You must turn from all your ways
Pick up your cross
Pick up your cross each day
 
Instrumental solo / Bridge
 
V3 (key change)
 
If you will serve Him, follow Him
Where He is His servant will be
There will be blessings in return
God honors all
God honors all who serve
 
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God honors all who serve
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