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Step Out in Faith (revised)
#1
Here's a new one fresh off the press...Let me know what it needs....bridge is iffy to me....
Thanks,
Tony

STEP OUT IN FAITH

Chorus:
Step out
Step out
Step out in faith
And see what God will do

Verse 1:
Shake off the pride of your human mind
Because flesh will not win this fight
You'll be better off trusting in Jesus
Than falling for the enemy's lies

God can do more with a little stone
In the hands of a faith-filled saint
Than an armor-clad, battle-trained army
Trusting in their power and strength

Chorus:

Verse 2:
Don't be afraid in this sinful age
To march out of your comfort zone
Though impossible in your own power
God won't make you go it alone

People are facing eternal death
In your hands are the keys to life
You're a Holy Ghost, Spirit-filled Christian
Commissioned by God for this time

Bridge:
You will never walk on the water
If you are waiting for a guarantee
You can do anything that God has commaded
If you will only step out, only step out and believe....
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#2
BTW...this is meant to be a hard rock song.
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#3
(08-18-2017, 12:20 PM)tpistilli Wrote: BTW...this is meant to be a hard rock song.

Given the tone and mood of the lyric a rock song sounds like a good idea. One man's opinion.

God Bless,

John
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#4
(08-21-2017, 08:11 PM)softproinc Wrote:
(08-18-2017, 12:20 PM)tpistilli Wrote: BTW...this is meant to be a hard rock song.

Given the tone and mood of the lyric a rock song sounds like a good idea. One man's opinion.

God Bless,

John

Thanks John. We'll see how it works out.
Tony
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#5
tony,

i realize "bridge is iffy to me" is not part of your lyrics. then again, is advice seen for CSN lyricists? are we to step out in bold or iffy faith in what jesus gives us to write?

Hard rock definitely asserts stepping out boldness, "step out and believe".
From death he did rise and will come again.
Move on with him now to be ready for then.
the gruvster
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#6
Sorry, but I really don't understand your comment. I was just stating that I was not sure if the bridge was just right yet. Thanks for the read though.
Tony
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#7
Tony, some good stuff here. I think the bridge is fine. It adds some slightly different material while staying connected to the theme.

Some thoughts:

1. 'Because flesh will not win this fight'. Can you bring this into the current age? Even if this is for Christians, I think it would be better to use wording related to 'natural man' instead of 'flesh'.
2. 'Than falling for the enemy's lies'. Not sure this line fits with the first part of the verse.
3. 'People are facing eternal death'. This is open to theological debate. I personally believe you would be better off keeping the lyric in the earthly plane and talking about what folks are missing now; today without the love of Jesus in their hearts.
4. 'In your hands are the keys to life'. Careful on this. I would suggest a tweak to put it back into the hands of God. We are his ministers, so I think that phrase gives us a bit too much responsibility. I know what you mean, but it could be misinterpreted by some.
5. 'You're a Holy Ghost, Spirit-filled Christian'. Kill 'Holy Ghost'. It's redundant anyway. Just use Spirit-filled Christian.
6. Now,add perfect rhyme, mix, bake and you will have something worthy of remembering.

Keep at 'er.

Best,
Anthony
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#8
Did you already have a melody chord progression idea for this ?  

Thanks , 

Blake
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#9
(11-23-2017, 08:14 PM)ahendriks Wrote: Tony, some good stuff here. I think the bridge is fine. It adds some slightly different material while staying connected to the theme.

Some thoughts:

1. 'Because flesh will not win this fight'. Can you bring this into the current age? Even if this is for Christians, I think it would be better to use wording related to 'natural man' instead of 'flesh'.
2. 'Than falling for the enemy's lies'. Not sure this line fits with the first part of the verse.
3. 'People are facing eternal death'. This is open to theological debate. I personally believe you would be better off keeping the lyric in the earthly plane and talking about what folks are missing now; today without the love of Jesus in their hearts.
4. 'In your hands are the keys to life'. Careful on this. I would suggest a tweak to put it back into the hands of God. We are his ministers, so I think that phrase gives us a bit too much responsibility. I know what you mean,  but it could be misinterpreted by some.
5. 'You're a Holy Ghost, Spirit-filled Christian'. Kill 'Holy Ghost'. It's redundant anyway. Just use  Spirit-filled Christian.
6. Now,add perfect rhyme, mix, bake and you will have something worthy of remembering.

Keep at 'er.

Best,
Anthony

Anthony,
Thanks so much for the feedback. You make some very good observations. I will definitely consider them.
Tony
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#10
(11-24-2017, 04:46 PM)bbraught Wrote: Did you already have a melody chord progression idea for this ?  

Thanks , 

Blake

Blake,
Thanks for taking the time to read the lyric. Yes and no to your question. I do have a melody in my head. However, I don't like it...ha ha. It was intended for a rock song that our band would play. Unfortunately, our band has broken up so I haven't thought about it for a bit. If you have something in mind, I would love to hear it.
Tony
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