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I Am Redeemed (scratch recording) - tpistilli - 03-18-2017

Hey all,
Here's a new worship song. I'm thinking a good one for altar call time.  Let me know what you think. This is just a scratch recording. I am hoping to get my studio up and running in the next 4-6 weeks and can get a great piano player and much, much better singer.

Tony

https://soundcloud.com/ctonyp/i-am-redeemed

I AM REDEEMED
© Tony Pistilli 2017
 
Intro:  E  A  E  B
 
Verse:
       E
As I come to the altar
                   F#m
And I fall on my knees
       B
Surrendering pride
     E            
Forgiveness received
G#m7      F#m
New life awakened 
         A                  B
I can start all over again
 
Chorus:
           E           A
I am redeemed
           C#m      B  
I am redeemed  
       A                                C#m
Through Jesus Christ
                                     A                      
I can stand on my feet
      A                        B       G#m7
Washed by the blood
                        A   (hold)
Eternally free
                     E           A
I am redeemed
                     C#m      B
I am redeemed
                    E          A  E  B (E ending)
I am redeemed


RE: I Am Redeemed (scratch recording) - novice62 - 03-19-2017


Hi Tony,

I listened to your song multiple times and like it a lot. 

One thing not essential but since it is praise and worship, you may want to consider it more of a soulful prayer between the singer and Jesus.  Thinking of that famous altar call....Just as I am..

Keep or sweep.....

Neil

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I AM REDEEMED

© Tony Pistilli 2017
 
Intro:  E  A  E  B
 
Verse:
As I come to the altar             Lord, I come to Your altar
And I fall on my knees                     
Surrendering pride                 Surrender my pride
Forgiveness received              Your mercy receive
New life awakened                 Something awakens
I can start all over again         Your new life inside me begins

Chorus:

I am redeemed
I am redeemed  
Through Jesus Christ                                Through You, my Christ                
I can stand on my feet                        
Washed by the blood                                  by Your blood
Eternally free
I am redeemed
I am redeemed
I am redeemed


RE: I Am Redeemed (scratch recording) - tpistilli - 03-19-2017

(03-19-2017, 02:01 PM)novice62 Wrote:
Hi Tony,

I listened to your song multiple times and like it a lot. 

One thing not essential but since it is praise and worship, you may want to consider it more of a soulful prayer between the singer and Jesus.  Thinking of that famous altar call....Just as I am..

Keep or sweep.....

Neil

-----------------------------------------------------------------


I AM REDEEMED

© Tony Pistilli 2017
 
Intro:  E  A  E  B
 
Verse:
As I come to the altar             Lord, I come to Your altar
And I fall on my knees                     
Surrendering pride                 Surrender my pride
Forgiveness received              Your mercy receive
New life awakened                 Something awakens
I can start all over again         Your new life inside me begins

Chorus:

I am redeemed
I am redeemed  
Through Jesus Christ                                Through You, my Christ                
I can stand on my feet                        
Washed by the blood                                  by Your blood
Eternally free
I am redeemed
I am redeemed
I am redeemed
Neil,
Thanks for the listen and comments. I definitely see your point on the perspective. I kind of want to keep it more of an internal view of the singer. I am not happy with the verse yet. I listened to it after sleeping on it and don't like it at all...I like the chorus though. I will post when I get it to my liking.
Tony


RE: I Am Redeemed (scratch recording) - tpistilli - 03-19-2017

Here is an updated version. I like it better.

https://soundcloud.com/ctonyp/i-am-redeemed-updated
I AM REDEEMED
© Tony Pistilli 2017

Intro: E A E B

Verse:
E
As I come to the altar
F#m
And I fall on my knees
B
Surrendering pride
A E
I offer my plea
G#m7 F#m
Freely forgiven
A B
My broken life renewed

Chorus:
E A
I am redeemed
C#m B
I am redeemed
A C#m
Through Jesus Christ
A
I can stand on my feet
A B G#m7
Washed by the blood
A (hold)
Eternally free
E A
I am redeemed
C#m B
I am redeemed
E A E B (E ending)
I am redeemed


RE: I Am Redeemed (scratch recording) - damp hamster - 03-20-2017

I like the revised verse lyrics - I think you did a definite upgrade there. After listening twice, I think you may need to fiddle with the timing of some of the words in the verse and maybe a word or two in the chorus as well.


RE: I Am Redeemed (scratch recording) - tpistilli - 03-20-2017

(03-20-2017, 08:23 AM)damp hamster Wrote: I like the revised verse lyrics - I think you did a definite upgrade there. After listening twice, I think you may need to fiddle with the timing of some of the words in the verse and maybe a word or two in the chorus as well.

Yo are absolutely right on the timing. I am hoping to get a real singer and piano player for this one.  Thanks for the comments.
Tony


RE: I Am Redeemed (scratch recording) - JordanC - 03-22-2017

Hi Tony,
This revised version is very good! This would make a good worship song in any congregation. Thanks for sharing, God bless!

Jordan


RE: I Am Redeemed (scratch recording) - tpistilli - 03-22-2017

(Yesterday, 07:27 AM)JordanC Wrote: Hi Tony,
  This revised version is very good! This would make a good worship song in any congregation. Thanks for sharing, God bless!

Jordan

Wow, Thanks Jordan.  I hope our worship leader feels the same way. 
Tony