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What a Wonderful Savior - firesong - 02-02-2018

This is my first solo write of 2018...I hope my year is filled with these kind of songs...simple and adoring...
https://soundclick.com/share.cfm?id=13687850

What a Wonderful Savior
words and music Dan Simmons

What a wonderful Savior…what a wonderful Lord
My Redeemer forever…my shield and my sword
Alpha, Omega, the beginning and end
Giver of grace…author of faith
What a wonderful Friend

Jesus the Master of the wind and the waves
Jesus the answer… the One who truly saves
Jesus my healer…the lover of my soul
What a wonderful Friend…true till the end
What a wonderful Lord

What a wonderful Savior…what a wonderful Lord
My Redeemer forever…my shield and my sword
Alpha, Omega, the beginning and end
Giver of grace…author of faith
What a wonderful Friend

What a wonderful Savior…what a wonderful Lord
My Redeemer forever…my shield and my sword
Alpha, Omega, the beginning and end
Giver of grace…author of faith
What a wonderful Friend

Giver of grace…author of faith
What a wonderful Friend

He’s a wonderful Friend


RE: What a Wonderful Savior - angela - 02-04-2018

Hi Dan
I really like this, well done
My only nit is the tag
I would reinforce the title there, as it is
"Wonderful Savior" and "Wonderful Lord" and "Wonderful Friend" seem to be vying for the title

If you are open to tweaking such a finished product, I would stick to either Wonderful Savior. or Friend, or Lord
and reinforce one of them by making it your last phrase in the chorus and verse.

so if you switch around

Alpha, Omega, the beginning and end
Giver of grace…author of faith
What a wonderful Friend

to something like this:
The beginning and end, Alpha, Omega
Giver of grace…author of faith
What a wonderful Savior

no biggie, but it might make it stronger, as it is right now, if I had only heard it and not seen it, I would not know what the title was

keep writing, keep sharing

Blessings
ang :


RE: What a Wonderful Savior - firesong - 02-05-2018

Ang...Thanks for your thoughts...I kinda struggled with what the title should be and I see the quandary...I will most likely change the title to "What a Wonderful Friend" or simply "Wonderful Friend" ...I don't really want to change the lyric due to rhyme schemes, flow and syllable counts and such...Of the three"Savior, Lord or Friend" I think Friend is probably the most appropriate and does fill the final tag and the end of both the verses and choruses....I appreciate your comments and I will make that change...Thanks again...Dan


RE: What a Wonderful Savior - angela - 02-05-2018

Ahh, that was simple!
Yes, you do end with Friend almost always, so there you go!
Blessings
ang Smile


RE: What a Wonderful Savior - JordanC - 02-12-2018

Hello Dan,
This is a beautiful song. Lyrically very well written and accompanied by a very nice melody. Your voice is strong and well suited in the production of this song. I was blessed so thanks for sharing. God bless!