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Choices - novice62 - 01-19-2018

All:  Here's one for your comments on how to improve it.  Thank you, Neil

copyright Neil Sleevi
Verse 1
Jesus tells us of two roads

Most folks like one real well

It's wide and easy trav’lin'

But a highway bound for hell

The other road is narrow

And it is hard to find

Few have ever found it

Yet this road leads to life


People will make choices
Choose to follow voices
Which lead to life or lead to death
Choices many will regret

Verse 2

Jesus tells us of two trees

One scarcely had much fruit

And cut up for the fire
For the little it produced

The other tree is diff'rent

Its food is fit to eat

Nourishment and goodness

Are what comes from this tree

Will we think that Jesus owes us

For all we've done and said?
Will He say He even knows us
For the choice we made instead?
Verse 3

Jesus tells us of two houses

The first was built on sand

Destroyed by winds and water

Which were more than it could stand
The other house endures

When trouble comes to knock

Overcoming perils

Established on a Rock

RE: Choices - firesong - 02-02-2018

Neil...I'm glad I never worked on this song...I would have ruined it...I love are a master at writing these "modern day hymns" and this melody is perfect for the rhyme and meter...I wouldn't change anything.. it would seem long for a contemporary song but Wesley or Luther would have written two more verses's great...Dan

RE: Choices - angela - 02-21-2018

Hi Neil
Another good one in the traditional style, a very nice arrangement, production and the singer is excellent for this genre

However, I wondered if you could switch the last line of the chorus to be more encouraging rather than warning
such as
Lord help me make choices I will not regret

This seems to be a finished product, so I don't know if you are really open to changes

ang Smile