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  Royalties question - to all participants
Posted by: gdball - 06-30-2017, 12:39 PM - Forum: Whetstone Project - Replies (11)

I'm writing this to the best of my ability as a pure suggestion - without any sort of pressure, but something to think through and I ask you to respond.  First an update: the total royalties received so far for Whetstone is just under $22 dollars. (to be exact, $21.965 and yes those are fractions of a penny, not a comma sorry Smile ) So far I've not asked for a payout from the distributor but have been keeping it as a reserve.

Using the statutory rate for writers and with the 50/50 split with 2ndfork, the most that any one person could receive is $3.15, and that is in the case of one song that sold a little more and had an artist/songwriter who had no other co-writers or band members to split it with.  50 cents is probably about the average for artists, and writers around a dime or so depending. I can write 15 cent checks or whatever if that is what you want, but it would be a little annoying. It gets especially annoying for future quarters as for example the whole album made just under $0.03 in streaming last quarter.

I've always assumed that most of you would like the album to stay up, but the time needed to keep up those kind of micro-payments doesn't seen productive - and is one reason I haven't jumped into a sequel.  

Regardless, It feels wrong to continue to keep it as a reserve at 2ndfork much longer though (I don't want any hint of improper actions) so here is my thought: 

CSN is the place where this started, and (if you are here) this forum has provided some support to all of us on this journey.  Could we decide to donate the proceeds thus far to Reese here at CSN as a minor thank you what he has spent month after month to run the forum?  Again there is no pressure - just a discussion.  We can put a cap on it if you want, saying that as long as total income for the album in any quarter is under $5 dollars, or under $20, or whatever, I'll donate it to CSN? Again - I can't emphasize enough - its just a question with no obligation but I would like to hear from you.

Greg

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  ***MIDDLE MAN**** 33333333333333
Posted by: Merziantwist - 06-29-2017, 08:43 PM - Forum: Lyric Critiques - No Replies

Not exactly gung-ho about the chorus in its present state. All thoughts, comments, critiques and the like are greatly appreciated.

--Peter


MIDDLE MAN


Lyrics by Peter Merz

That tug-o-war you're feeling now
Is a warning flag
Your happy ending just cried, “Foul!”
And a torn-out page
Would have better luck than you
That pull on your soul
Means heads they win, tails you lose
Oh-no, you've just become the center that won't hold

CHORUS
Middle Man, Middle Man
Broken already, and breaking still
Middle Man, Middle Man
Pain is your steady, heart aching still
When you're the Middle, Middle Man
When you're the Middle, Middle Man

Some days you’re the most hated ref
You don’t get no slack
Two sides putting you to the test
Wanting to change hats
‘Cause you’re feeling battered and bruised
But you’ve just been made
So heads they win, tails you lose
Oh-no, this is much more than just one man can take

CHORUS

INSTRUMENTAL

BRIDGE
But Jesus was a Middle Man, too
Stuck between two criminals on a cross of pain
A Roman Coin tossed in the air,
The crowds yelled, “Heads we win, tails you lose!”
But that Middle Man kept giving His love away
No matter how long, or unfair

REPEAT CHORUS

OUTRO
Middle Man, Jesus knows just what it’s like
He hears your prayers, and He really cares
Jesus was a Middle Man, too
Middle Man, I think you’ll find you got a lot more fight
And when life gets unfair, go cast your cares
On Jesus and He’ll see you through
For Jesus was a Middle Man, too


Copyright ©2017 Scribe And Sage Music (BMI).  All Rights Reserved.

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  Eye of the Needle
Posted by: bronco - 06-28-2017, 02:27 PM - Forum: Lyric Critiques - Replies (1)

Eternal life it seems is an impossible squeeze

And the rich man dejectedly walked away

So, what does this mean to us of lesser means

If that’s the way it is who can be saved?

 

(Chorus)

But we may pass through the eye of the needle

And the precarious narrow way we’ll trod

Faith can cast away mountains that stand in our way

And things impossible with man are more than possible with God

 

(Verse 1)

We cling to what won’t save

Until he sweeps it all away

With the persistent iconoclastic tide
Then when it’s sink or swim


And we might float downstream towards him

We founder tryin’ to find someplace to hide

But humility himself loves us freely

And he’ll heal our apostasy

We’ll put our faith in Him

And He’ll teach us how to swim

And maybe how to walk upon the sea

(Chorus)

 

(Verse 2)

And we wallow in afflictions

And we swallow our addictions

And Satan bids us, “Embrace futility”

But the dying Christ forbids us

And our living savior bids us.

“Christian, take up that cross and follow me”

And though afflicted we’re not forsaken

With each misstep, we’ll repent and persevere

Walkin’ in his steps

We’ll rehearse his death

As the rehearsal of his resurrection draws near

(Chorus)



(Verse 3)

We have an invitation

To the marriage feast celebration

But we discover we haven’t a thing to wear

These filthy rags won’t do

With holes they’re riddled through

And our nakedness shows through here and there

But the lamb has prepared for everything

And transfigured by his transforming grace

We’ll be wearing white robes glimmering
Reflecting the light of his face

(Chorus)
 

Lord, why do you insist that each day I visit the precipice of despair

Knowing there’s a part of me that still might take the plunge

Hold my hand as you tell me “That will never be because you love me”

Deliver me from each wretched, manic lunge.
 
 




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  Feedback
Posted by: angela - 06-25-2017, 05:58 PM - Forum: General Discussion - Replies (3)

Hi All
It's great to see so many people posting but it's sad to see how little feedback is offered.
Lately it seems that people post without offering crits to peers

please be mindful of the guidelines:

7)   When posting in the critique forums, please be respectful of others.  There are guidelines which will help you with appropriate etiquette for the critique forums and “how to critique” as well as “how to receive critiques” (basically don’t think someone is attacking your “baby” and please be open to changes).
Also, it is appropriate to comment on 3 other peoples’ songs/lyrics for every one thread you expect critiques on.  A 3:1 ratio helps the community grow and be able to support each other.


It is important for the flow of feedback.
Your feedback is very important!Smile
Be sure to read "Code of Conduct" and " How to offer critique"

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  [titleless...]
Posted by: jimdarlington - 06-25-2017, 05:34 PM - Forum: Lyric Critiques - Replies (2)

The people are watching
They look and they stare
It don't even matter
If nobody's there
He lives for their eyes
Whether real or in dreams
And the audience always
Sees him, or so it seems
He looks back and forth
But not up and down
for an ounce of attention 
He's ever the clown

C'mon boy, look up
Look up at the new morning sky
You can almost see Heaven
From right where you are
And an Angel just flew by

He called to you softly
"There's no one else here
There's no crowd to listen
There's no one to cheer."
Then the Angel shouted
And it rattled his soul
"Your foot's next step's
In a very deep hole
You're right on the lip
Of a bottomless sneer
Whose teeth are all anger
Whose throat is all fear
Whose belly is darkness
And heart endless cold
Whose pity is empty
Whose hatred is bold
His veins are full of venom
He uses claws for hands
And nothing else will grow
Anywhere he stands
He eats fools for breakfast
And thrives on what seems
The illusion of beauty
He lures them with dreams"

C'mon boy, step back again now
The praise of men is not the goal
But to sing Alleluia
From the top of your soul

The heavens declare His glory
The sky is high and wide
Above it are the ones that live
Even though they died
They follow the One
That gives new breath
And they laugh with the One
Who laughs at death

[More later, maybe...]

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  Chant/Song Revision1
Posted by: jimdarlington - 06-25-2017, 09:14 AM - Forum: Lyric Critiques - Replies (7)

Lord Lord Lord
O Lord Lord
There comes a time for a man to lay down
For a man to lay down and die
There comes a time
When the tongue can no longer
utter another lie
 
Lord Lord Lord
O Lord Lord
He goes to sleep and the truth comes a risin'
And there's no more time to wonder why
You measure the faith a man professes
Did he lift his hands to You
Or bury his face in his hands and sigh?
 
Lord Lord Lord
O Lord Lord
You know all the things these hands have done
Did they caress the broken hearted
Or cover these ears against their cry?
Did they reach out to rescue a drowning soul
Or stand on the shore and wave goodbye?
Where was I Lord?
Where can I find it, my perfect alibi?
 
Lord Lord Lord
O Lord Lord
We surely know a stone sinks down
While a bird will rise up and fly
You surely know my sin feels heavy
And I have no wings to try
I know you died on the cross for me
But who exactly am I?
 
Lord Lord Lord
O Lord Lord
Have I shoved a dream to the front of a line
Just to gnash my teeth and cry?
The fear of the Lord is forever clean
And it's never Him who says good-bye
I can only trust that you will judge
If I ever knew you at all, my Lord                                                                                                                    
In this life You gave me, by and by.
 
Lord Lord Lord
O Lord Lord                                                                                                                                                  
You warned us that the flesh is weak                                                                                                                
But the Spirit is more than willing to try
And at times upon a glorious dawn
Your Spirit comes to me, whispering why
There's a home that's holy, safe and warm
You made for Your children above the sky
Lord O Lord
Those who follow their Risen Savior will rise
And know in His Glory forever why
To know His joy no more to cry
To know Your love, Lord, and never die
Lord Lord Lord
O Lord Lord
Lord Lord Lord
O Lord Lord

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  How Many Should I Tell?
Posted by: jimdarlington - 06-24-2017, 02:16 PM - Forum: Lyric Critiques - Replies (2)

How Many Should I Tell?
How many sad people do you know,
And how many each day do you see,
Whose smile has lost its glorious glow,
Whose smile is all of a desperate plea,
"Please know me and tell me I carry a seed.
What purpose will make me alive?
I'm empty, I'm empty, I smile my need.
O when will my Savior arrive?
O when will my Savior arrive?"

Rejoice! Rejoice! Redeemed! Redeemed!
You must enter His Kingdom a child,
Like an infant whose eyes see heaven it seems,
That the lost may recall how we smiled,
In the light of His love, how we smiled.

How often, how sadly do you hear
The whimper behind the brave face,
That would mask a soul so full of fear,
Of a day that will come without grace,
To have turned when the Lord was so near,
To an endless night, in a godless place.
O do not own that hungry soul
That your silence would judge and so deprive.
Share the light and be so bold
Just tell them truly their Savior's alive
Tell their pain that the Savior's alive

Rejoice! Rejoice! Redeemed! Redeemed!
You must enter His Kingdom a child,
Like an infant whose eyes see heaven it seems,
That the lost may recall how we smiled,
In the light of His love, how we smiled.

How deep in the night are we now?
How close to the rule of the evil one?
We will last, how many are wondering how
Until the return of the Son.
Yes, until the return of the Son.
When every knee will bow,
To confess Him as Lord, glory begun.
Child love the heaven bound soul,
Who you told that this day would arrive.
Shared the light so true and so bold,
Told them truly their Savior is alive,
Told their heart that the Savior's alive!

Rejoice! Rejoice! Redeemed! Redeemed!
You must enter His Kingdom a child,
Like an infant whose eyes see heaven it seems,
That the lost may recall how we smiled,
In Jesus Christ, how we smiled.

How strange the promise of life evermore
To those who but number the years
The promise that death will be nevermore
Nor the sum of the soul's unholy fears.
Come to Jesus ! Come to Jesus!
Take my hand, come meet my Friend!
He the One who loves us, sees us,
Died for us and rose again,
That we might be reborn and then
Tell all that our Savior's alive!

Rejoice! Rejoice! Redeemed! Redeemed!
You must enter His Kingdom a child,
Like an infant whose eyes see heaven it seems,
That the lost may recall how we smiled,
In the light of His love, how we smiled, we smiled,
In Jesus Christ, how we smiled.

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  ChantSong
Posted by: jimdarlington - 06-24-2017, 01:30 PM - Forum: Lyric Critiques - No Replies

Lord Lord Lord
Lord Lord
There comes a time for a man to lay down
For a man to lay down and die

Lord Lord Lord
Lord Lord
There comes a time
When the tongue can no longer
utter another lie

Lord Lord Lord
Lord Lord
He goes to sleep and the truth comes a risin'
And there's no more time to wonder why

Lord Lord Lord
Lord Lord
You measure the faith a man professes
Did he lift his hands to You
Or bury his face in his hands and sigh

Lord Lord Lord
Lord Lord
You know all the things these hands have done
Did they reach out to rescue a drowning soul
Or stand on the shore and wave goodbye
Where is it Lord, my alibi?

Lord Lord Lord
Lord Lord
We surely know a stone sinks down
While a bird will rise up and fly

Lord Lord Lord
Lord Lord
You know my sin feels heavy
And I have no wings to try
I know you died on the cross for me
But who exactly am I?

Lord Lord Lord
Lord Lord
Have I shoved a dream to the front of a line
Just to gnash my teeth and cry?

Lord Lord Lord
Lord Lord
I can only trust that you will judge
If I ever knew you, by and by.

Lord Lord Lord
Lord Lord
At times upon a glorious dawn
Your Spirit comes, whispering why
There's a home forever safe and warm
That You've prepared above the sky

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  How Long
Posted by: jimdarlington - 06-24-2017, 01:21 PM - Forum: Lyric Critiques - No Replies

How Long?                                                                                       
 
How long, how long is forever?
How long is eternity?
Let me show you a full glass of water
Watch me pour it out into the sea
              
How wrong, how wrong, the fear of never
Knowing why you came to be
The King who made you lives forever
To walk with Him His blessed decree
              
How strong, how strong the holy tether
That binds the souls that He sets free
Jesus' love draws us together
Rejoicing yet weeping at Calvary
              
How finely drawn the plans of nations
How plainly known the thoughts of men
No worldly vision of salvation
No comfort now, no heaven then
              
O low born creature, the Great Creator
In love gave you the choice to see
How the Father made you in holy purpose
His faithful child forever to be
 
What a lie His promise of love forever
If life's final boundaries are birth and the grave
What truth in His promise to all that ever
Call on His Name their soul will be saved
              
Oh Lord your angry sword is falling
To part the selfish from the free
Who hear the love of Jesus calling
Who give their hearts to worship thee
 
Oh gentle mercy a breeze from Heaven
As from this world we surely pass
His holy wrath a fear behind us
Into His arms, we fall at last
His sweet, safe arms forever at last
 
Jim Darlington

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  God In Me
Posted by: Dell Neal - 06-21-2017, 08:31 PM - Forum: Lyric Critiques - Replies (2)

Critique please, I have put music to this, however because of my limited abilities there is a sameness about what I do. So if you so desire, have at it!! Thanks.


                                     God In Me
Vs1.
God in me, be my face today
see through my eyes and guide what I say
embrace my heart so all will see, You in me

Vs2.
God in me, take my doubt and fear
open my mind and let me hear
speak through me so all can see, you in me

Chorus
Your love is deep, your love is pure, your face I seek, you're
my reward, breathe in me life in me, you in me

Vs3
God in me, tend your fire
Breathe life in me, you're my desire
Show your love so all can see, you in me
 
Chorus
Your love is deep, your love is pure, your face I seek, you're my
reward breathe in me, life in me, you in me

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