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  Stronger Still (A song about hope)
Posted by: Afterdarkness - 24 minutes ago - Forum: Song Critiques - No Replies

Stronger Still

oday was cold and dreary
Tomorrow too it seems
But the rain that falls today
Brings the flowers of tomorrow

Fear is a mighty force
It can kill
Hope is stronger still
It will live

The papers on the table
Herald a coming death
In the the throes of lustful sin
Nothing good seems to happen

Fear is a mighty force
It has killed

His cries were forsaken
Waiting for the wrath to come
And from the holes of hell
A new hope springs forth

Sin is a mighty force
It will kill
But love is stronger still
It will live
Love will win

Today was cold and dreary
Tomorrow too it seems
But the Rain that falls today
Brings the flowers of tomorrow

Fear is a mighty force
It will kill
But hope is stronger still
It will live


Hope y'all enjoy

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  Pianist needed (collaboration)
Posted by: ShannonB - Yesterday, 10:42 AM - Forum: General Discussion - No Replies

Hey guys,
I am seeking a pianist for one of my songs. This is not a paid position, but you will be considered a collaborator on the project. So, if the song ever makes any money, you will get a share Smile
Once I find out if I have any takers (or rather givers :Smile I will post in Songs. I'm pretty sure the song is already here somewhere, so feel free to take a stab at guessing which one it is Smile
Thanks,
Shannon

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  ***BAD MISSIONARY*** 3333333
Posted by: Merziantwist - Yesterday, 04:52 AM - Forum: Song Critiques - Replies (1)

http://soundclick.com/share.cfm?id=13552176



This song more or less is along the lines of novelty-pop, I suppose.  The gist of it, what if Jonah and the King Nineveh had cell-phones?  The song is told from the King of Nineveh's P.O.V.

BAD MISSIONARY

Words and Music by Peter Merz

Stepping on toes just a torturing my foes
That's when the phone rang out
Called my mom last week, made it short and sweet
Hello, is anybody there
I have a collect call from Mr. Jonah
Do you accept, I said yes
Why I said yes is a mystery 
A mystery to both you and me
I've got home and fire insurance policies
Needing your royal approval
But before I could seal the deal
He told me hey buddy get real
Acts of God are not covered 
Guess you're straight out of luck
Jonah laughed, then the line went dead
Guess I'll be shelling out some bucks

Chorus:
Bad missionary, bad missionary
Delighting in pre-arranged acts of doom
Bad missionary, bad missionary
Counting down the days 'til my town's a tomb
Bad missionary, bad missionary
I guess you could say things went boom
Bad missionary, bad missionary
It goes to show never assume...

Next day I had a blast playin' Whack-A-Mole
With all kinds of threats to the throne 
Until the phone did its thang, No it still isn't Mom
This just seems oh so wrong
I don't need insurance, good, because mister 
That's not why I'm cold-calling you today
Cocky little prankster, I'll play along for now
What you need is a pre-need funeral plan
Isn't there someone else to annoy
Friends, family, or poisonous reptiles
There was a long pause, then he laughed out loud
Well I'd love to stay and good luck
I need to get back to some important work
Sipping those drinks with those funny names
The ones with those silly little umbrellas
Oh and by the way how's your mom

Chorus

Bridge:
Well I traced Jonah's number
Some captain sobbed, he ran from God
Now he is with the fish of the see
Stunned I hung up, what rotten luck
Days passed by when someone shouted
Would you look what Dagon dragged in
This guy who was rife with the stink of fish 
And salt water was a shoutin'
No, you're doing it wrong and you'll be destroyed
See I know about these things
I felt something I had never felt before
Conviction right down to my core
So I declared a city-wide fast
Let's hedge our bets and repent
So everyone put on your finest sackcloth
And maybe the Lord will relent

Chorus

Tag:
We didn't bite the big one
Our days were not done after all
No more waterboarding our guests
Or ignoring the golden rule
We didn't bite the big one
Our days were not done after all
The City of Nineveh kept its cool
In the end it worked out for the best
...all because of a bad missionary

Copyright © 2017 Scribe And Sage Music (BMI). All Rights Reserved.

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  Lyrics I'm working on
Posted by: Jbj51382 - 04-24-2017, 06:33 PM - Forum: Lyric Critiques - Replies (1)

Just wanted to share some lyrics I'm working on. I'm still working out a bridge and possibly another verse. Thanks for the feedback.

  Verse  1                             
Redeemed by your pain    
Purified by the flame          
Alive now in grace             
Our hearts bear your name       
   Verse 2
Blazing and burning
You speak from the flame
Drawn to you calling
Your Glory fills this place        
  Chorus
Surround Your church with your fire
Let your glory fill her
Your most precious possession
Hearts burning for you

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  Walk Me Home
Posted by: angela - 04-23-2017, 04:46 PM - Forum: Song Critiques - Replies (7)

Hi All
I have not been here for a while and need to get back and get busy!!!!

Thanks for your time

 all crits welcome!


http://soundclick.com/share.cfm?id=13554167


Walk Me Home           
Verse 1
Walk me through the shadows
I feel so afraid
Enveloped in darkness
I whisper your name
Walk me through the wind and rain
Where rivers overflow
Hush the bitter hurricane
Walk me till I’m home
 
Verse 2
Walk me though the fire
Shield me from the flame
Surrounded by temptation
I call on your name
Walk me to the streets of gold
Let me behold your throne
I’ll hold tightly to your hand
As you walk me home
 
CHORUS
Walk me to the Promised Land
Where milk and honey flow
There amazed I’ll sing your praise
My God has walked me home
 
Verse 3
You walked me through the valley
When I was easy prey
A world that would consume me
I shouted your name
You walked me though the battlefield
Defeated every foe
My arms can bend a bow of steel
You walked me till I’m home
 
CHORUS
 
BRIDGE
I know you’ll walk me home
My God will walk me home
 
CHORUS
©2017 angela dittmar
Angel Flower Music LLC
angelflowermusic.com

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  You rescue me
Posted by: Out of the Fray - 04-19-2017, 09:15 PM - Forum: Song Critiques - Replies (8)

We are finally out of the studio after fits and starts with the recording process here in my home. Let me know what you think. You rescue me

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  Here's My Song (Of The Grace That You've Given Me)
Posted by: SquareElvis - 04-18-2017, 07:47 AM - Forum: Lyric Critiques - No Replies

Here's My Song
(Of The Grace That You've Given Me)


Verse 1

Lord, I can't escape
Your warm embrace
It's making me whole
It's saving my soul
Your gentle voice
Cuts through the noise
I'm led by every word
I'm fed by what is heard

Pre-Chorus

Oh Lord, I'm amazed
Of all You do
I know I can't repay
But here's my song to You

Chorus 

Here's my song 
My offering
For all that You've done
And all that You're doing
Every word
My heart sings
Of the grace.... (of the grace)
Of the grace 
That You've given me

Verse 2 

Lord, come what may
Your love won't change
Your grace and your mercy
Will never desert me
You'll always be
Here with me
Through the valleys and storms
I'm safe in Your arms

Chorus 

Bridge

Lord, Your grace is enough
Lord, Your grace is enough
Lord, Your grace is enough
For me
Lord, Your grace is enough
Lord, Your grace is enough
Lord, Your grace is enough
For me to sing

Chorus

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  Blessings Along The Way
Posted by: Timpaul - 04-15-2017, 05:30 PM - Forum: Song Critiques - Replies (1)

https://soundcloud.com/timpaul-2/sets/bl...ng-the-way

Wake up in the morning, to face another day
Clouds are hanging low won't go away
Make your morning coffee, shower and get dressed
Seems like nothing's changed.
But if you just look around and open up your eyes
You will see the blessings along the way

Follow where he leads you, don't fight him along the way
The road it might be rough, but take it anyway
And he won't let you down, if you let him lead the way
Enjoy the blessings along the way

No one said it's easy, walking in your shoes
Sometimes it seems we win, other times we lose
But he won't let you down if you let him lead the way
Enjoy the blessings along the way

It's hard to lose a loved one, so hard to understand 
How does this all fit, in Gods master plan
But if you just look around and open up your eyes
You will see the blessing along the way, along the way
Blessings along the way, along the way
Blessings along the way

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  God of the Impossible - any critique
Posted by: Raeshelparker - 04-14-2017, 01:06 AM - Forum: Lyric Critiques - Replies (2)

My brother, mother and I are collaborating on a new song....

Here is his version, mom's version and my version below.  Which one do you like and why?

His version

V1
You walked on water
You parted the red sea
You silenced the wind and the waves

Pre Chorus
There is nothing impossible, for you my king
There is nothing impossible for you

Chorus
You're the God of the impossible
You're the God of the impossible
There is nothing you have not conquered
No Matter the chal - en - ge
You defeated every one at the cro--ah-oss
You're God of the Impossible

V2
you created light with your word
you breathed into clay making man
You left your throne and came into the world

Chorus
You're the God of the impossible
You're the God of the impossible
There is nothing you have not conquered
No Matter the chal - en - ges
You defeated every one at the cro--ah-oss
You're God of the Impossible

v3
You told the lame man get up and walk
Made mud to heal the blind
You hung on the cross defeating every sin


Chorus
You're the God of the impossible
You're the God of the impossible
There is nothing you have not conquered
No Matter the chal - en - ges
You defeated every one at the cro--ah-oss
You're God of the Impossible

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  This Is Heaven
Posted by: tpistilli - 04-12-2017, 04:30 PM - Forum: Lyric Critiques - No Replies

Feel free to critique   Cry

This Is Heaven

Verse 1:
I wonder what it's like
To walk on streets of gold
Experiencing life
Where time has no control
To live without this fleshly man of death
having only thoughts of righteousness
Although this place is hard to comprehend
I'll hold this blessed hope with confidence

Chorus:
This, this is Heaven
This, this is Heaven
No more sorrow, no more pain
Every tear's been wiped away
All the former doubts and fears are gone
Then I'll see my Savior's face
Full of wonder of His grace
Oh to finally hear those words "Well done"
Welcome home
This is Heaven

Verse 2:
I'll take my final breath
And reach the finish line
This passage we call death
A temporary lie
For all the battles won and sometimes lost
Thank God I never failed to count the cost

I'm going to a place prepared for me
And with eternal eyes I'll finally see

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